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A monster, a creature of the night
Can smell your fear in the air
Sending chills up your spine with its silent growl
The menace that children fear the most
Makes you quake in terror with its haunting stillness
It thrives in the shadows; those dark corners under your bed
Unseen, yet imminent.
At your most vulnerable moment, it creeps upon you
Like a predator stalking its unfortunate prey
Your dreams are consumed until nothing remains
Razor sharp claws tear at your soul
You scream out on anguish, greeted only by silence
Hot, noxious breath poisons your heart
Damaging it beyond repair
Massive jaws grip your weakened state
Suffocating you as you gasp for air
Sharp fangs pierce your skin, injecting venomous pain
As you lay in agony, encased by the evil presence
The monster sneers at your helplessness
Snarling, merciless laughter ringing in your ears
Like a never ending vortex, you fall deeper into the creature's trap
An endless pit of despair-

Awake. The darkness is gone.
Yet nothing is left but a hollow shell.
An aching heart.
A searing pain..
The Nightmare has left its mark.
Scars that will never disappear.
This is a free verse poem I wrote for a school literature competition. I still have to submit it, but I thought you guys might enjoy it. YOU GUYS GET A SPECIAL PREVIEW CUZ YOU'RE ALL SPECIAL :icondragonglomp:
It's kinda.... dark XD but I worked really hard on it, so please try not to flame. Thanks everyone!
Please comment I love hearing from you!
:icondonotuseplz::iconmyartplz:
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:iconmoon-lit-words:
what is the theme of the contest? any particular guidelines for submissions?
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ForestOfKells Dec 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Nope, just submit up to 2 pieces of literature (poems, short stories, etc)
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:iconmoon-lit-words:
i'd suggest possible stanza breaks :
Like a predator stalking its unfortunate prey

Your dreams are consumed until nothing remains


and

As you lay in agony, encased by the evil presence

The monster sneers at your helplessness


and maybe continuing one-line full stop clauses in the last stanza :

Awake.
The darkness is gone.
. . .


just thoughts =)
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ForestOfKells Dec 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much! I was hoping someone would give me advice XD
Thanks!
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:iconmoon-lit-words:
welcome. have fun with the competition
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ForestOfKells Dec 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks!
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Wow super cool poem but I'm a littl frightened :iconshiverplz:
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ForestOfKells Dec 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
XD thanks
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:iconnekomander-happy:
I can't wait for more (a little less scary) work from you!
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ForestOfKells Dec 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! haha sure XD
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